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[–]Marowak 42 points43 points ago

You called it both a 'torch' and a 'flashlight'. Where are you from?

Nice story, by the way.

[–]papercrane1001[S] 33 points34 points ago

US; I've just been reading a lot of British authors lately. I didn't notice until after I was done, and then when I tried replacing the word it didn't quite read right.

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[–]Guidonhue 36 points37 points ago

http://i.imgur.com/sumHr.gif This is what you saw /r/WTF

[–]Iwokeupwithoutapillo 17 points18 points ago

Urgh! What the fuck on earth is that?

[–]DanRYoung 12 points13 points ago

Oh that? That's Wheels. Great guy. Doesn't talk much.

[–]LittleGirlBlue 6 points7 points ago

It has to be a robot of some sort.

[–][deleted] 5 points6 points ago

That's what I keep telling myself. DO NOT PROVE ME WRONG!

[–]REPTILE512TB 3 points4 points ago

It is not, it is the cousin of what OP saw.

[–][deleted] 3 points4 points ago

well its not like I wanted to sleep this year or anything...

[–]lolyunohazsmart 11 points12 points ago

This was very well written! And now I'm in even more of a hurry to make sure all my locks work correctly!!

[–]SwimSquirrel 23 points24 points ago

Great story man! However, the whole time I was thinking of this. ;)

[–]agentlemns 2 points3 points ago

HERE COME THE HAAAX!

[–]aten97 1 point2 points ago

I was too!

[–]taco1327 16 points17 points ago

This is probably the best story I have seen on r/nosleep. Upvote!

[–]Conlaeb 5 points6 points ago

Stories like this are why I visit this sub. You had my upvote two paragraphs in.

[–]Taltin 10 points11 points ago

The buildup was great, and the story itself is very chilling. Well written as well, upvote!

[–]Kataron 5 points6 points ago

Creepy as balls.

[–]dubbya 5 points6 points ago

Just checked all of my locks again, you brilliant bastard.

[–]z-gzag 3 points4 points ago

Why would you need to check the locks when it's already IN YOUR HOUSE!

[–]dubbya 0 points1 point ago

But it was in the hall. Right? O_o

[–]Cknieff 10 points11 points ago

did they run down the stairs past the creature? Woudnt they be grabbed too? I'm kind of confused.

[–]papercrane1001[S] 20 points21 points ago

Depends, when did you mean? He started out in his room on the second floor, saw the thing coming up the stairs, and ran back to his room.

At the end when everyone ran out the creature had already disappeared, having claimed a victim already. The idea wasn't so much that it dragged her out of bed and chucked her down the stairs so much as that if it could get to you, then you were found dead at the bottom of the stairs. I figure that we would be remiss to restrict the spiritual world to the laws of causality when even the physical world doesn't always abide by them.

[–]Forscher 4 points5 points ago

Excellent. I had thought so! Super creepy and very well written!

[–]WKCarbine 6 points7 points ago

I don't care if the laws of reality don't completely apply to it, it's in our world and so it's got to play by some of our rules... thus I recommend using gun, if that don't work, use more gun.

[–][deleted] 3 points4 points ago

So basically, it bends reality in such a way that it always kills you on the stairwell regardless of where you or it is?

[–]z-gzag 2 points3 points ago

I was thinking the same thing, also doesn't anyone that lives there come home late?

[–]Cknieff 0 points1 point ago

what I meant was, he went to the cooler to get his water. he said it was at the top of the stairs. so when he ran back to his room after he saw the thing. the idea that he would have to run past it was sort of confusing. maybe i read it wrong but I thought he had to go up the stairs to get his water, and then run down past the creature to get to his apartment.

[–]neverenderlyrics 1 point2 points ago

op lives on the top floor

[–]Synisterr 0 points1 point ago

I was wondering the same thing

[–]AThousandSuns12 5 points6 points ago

Ooh creepy! This simply gives me the chills

[–]Izviral 2 points3 points ago

Slightly confused, did Leanne run down the stairs and fall? What happened to the crawly thing?

[–][deleted] 3 points4 points ago

From what I gather, if it gets you, no matter what, you instantly die on the stairs because the laws of reality don't apply to it.

[–]honeybunnyblossom 2 points3 points ago

I think she was thrown down the stairs. At least, the hand marks fading from her ankles seemed to indicate that.

[–]Captain_Nonsense 1 point2 points ago

I had this really weird mental image of the thing suddenly moving at an abnormally fast speed as soon as the door was opened. Don't know if that is what the author intended, but it seemed creepier that way, to me.

[–]viperslate13610 3 points4 points ago

Very nice :) one of my favorite stories on /r/nosleep so far! McUpvote!

[–]Puffalump 3 points4 points ago

Thank you, for providing further fuel for my lock checking OCD.

A+++ would read again.

[–]Christemo 3 points4 points ago

NOPE, i know better than to click a link on nosleep.

[–]shamrock771 1 point2 points ago

Please tell me that's fake, or a movie prop?

[–]MindlessDream 4 points5 points ago

Haha yeah man. It's from The Walking Dead, I highly recommend watching it.

[–]scrawnypaleman 1 point2 points ago

The description of the, thing, makes me think of the Old Gods (Lovecraft) as in they are incomprehensible.

[–]TheDarkWolfy 1 point2 points ago

Thank you... now i have to find the key that locks my door.. there's a fucking staircase right next to it T_T

[–]BDillz28 1 point2 points ago

This would make a great episode of the twilight zone!!

[–]That_Weeaboo_Girl 1 point2 points ago

There is no lock on my door ;_;

[–]WKCarbine 2 points3 points ago

Same... my only consolation is that my parents room and my sisters room are closer to the stairs.

[–]Mugendai 1 point2 points ago

Excellent, excellent choice of title. It both sets up anticipation for the story to come without giving too much away AND acts as a darkly humorous epilogue at the same time.

[–]nazgulslayer3000 1 point2 points ago

This is for sure a stupid question to ask, but, is your sister ok?

[–]CodenameMolotov 1 point2 points ago

So what you're saying is, only live in handicapped accessible places?

[–]rfbobby 1 point2 points ago

Really well written. Good use of words.

[–]bicuriouschild 0 points1 point ago

I was thinking more like this

[–]kvikklunsj 0 points1 point ago

That was extremely well written and a very good story. Give us more, please!

[–]OtterOwnage 0 points1 point ago

Aaaaah this story was so good! Thoroughly creeped out now...

[–]minax128 0 points1 point ago

Sweet jesus, this is creepy as fuck :/

[–]itsjohn56 0 points1 point ago

Wait?! This is true? And great story!

[–]pawrence 0 points1 point ago

NooooooooooooooooooooooooooOoOoooo

[–]lazychica 0 points1 point ago

Ruddy brilliant. Writing i mean. It's tragic what happened to her... I imagine she wasn't thrown down the stairs, but rather was running away and the thing grabbed her ankles and she tripped.

[–]hill78 0 points1 point ago

Sad and terrifying. Just the way I like'em. Upvote!

[–]lightsinmyhead 0 points1 point ago

Nice. Second part was very well written, first part was meh:ish.

[–][deleted] 0 points1 point ago

I'm very confused with the layout of your story (the apartment building).

[–]yourmadbroski 0 points1 point ago

I just locked my door

[–]Anbre 0 points1 point ago

I had to come back to this just to comment. Last night I read your story just before I went to bed and I thought it was creepy, but nothing that would keep me up, right? Right?? As soon as I turned off my lamp to sleep I got so scared just thinking about this story. Well done, thanks for the restless night. ;-)

[–]CaptainZef 0 points1 point ago

the Rake YOURE GONNA DIE

[–]eKtoR 0 points1 point ago

Dude! Awesome skills! Keep them stories coming.

[–]isabellameyers 0 points1 point ago

Halfway through reading the description of the thing and my phone vibrated, had to check my pants after that